23. Some people think that public transit should be accessible to all, even if this means higher taxes. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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citizen
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citizens
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statement. The reasons and examples will be discussed below.
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transportation
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make
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makes
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by
place effortlessly which Change preposition
to
enhance
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enhances
people
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stay
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staying
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.
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transportation
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on public
transports
which is now Fix the agreement mistake
transport
the
major problem in various states.
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a
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people
pay more taxes. Use synonyms
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Accessible
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economy
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the economy
ones
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also
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problems
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