A glance at the graph provided reveals the proportion of tourists visiting four attractions in Brighton, Art Gallery, Pavilion, Pier, and Festival over 30 - year period between 1980 and 2010.

A glance at the graph provided reveals the proportion of tourists visiting four attractions in Brighton, Art Gallery, Pavilion, Pier, and Festival over 30 - year period between 1980 and 2010.
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A glance at the graph provided reveals the proportion of tourists visiting four attractions in Brighton, Art Gallery,
Pavilion
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, Pier, and Festival over
30 - year
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30-year
period between 1980 and 2010.
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out
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from the graph is that the
Pavilion
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and Art Gallery saw the most significant changes in visitor numbers, with the
Pavilion
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being the most popular attraction over the period in question. Another interesting point is that the Festival's popularity remained relatively stable, and the Pier experienced a gradual increase in visitors. Looking at the details, as regards
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, the percentage went up exponentially from just over 20% in 1980, 10 a peak of roughly 47% in 1995. The figure
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fell rapidly, declining to just over 30% in 2010. If we look at Pier, which began with the lowest percentage of tourists at just 10% in 1980. It experienced steady growth over the 30 years, reaching approximately 22% by 2010.
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, despite increasing dramatically to 30% in 1985, the percentage of visitors to the Art Gallery dropped sharply, falling to under 20%in
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dipping to 3% in 2010.
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, the festival maintained a stable trend, fluctuating slightly around 30%throughout the 30 years.
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