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Writing Samples
Band 7.5

A friend has agreed to look after your house and pet while you are on holiday. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: give contact details for when you are away, give instructions about how to care for your pet, describe other household duties you would like your friend to undertake.

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Thank you so much for agreeing to take care of my house and pet
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 I am on holiday. I really appreciate your help, and I know everything will be in safe hands. If you need to contact me, you can call or message me on my phone anytime, or reach me through email. I will
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 share the hotel details where I will be staying in Paris, just in case you need to meet immediately. As for Bella, my dog she needs to be fed twice a day — once in the morning and once in the evening. Her food is in the cup near the fridge. Please
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 take her for a short walk in the park nearby, she loves that.
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, if you could water the plants twice a week and collect the mail from the postbox, that would be wonderful. Thanks again! Sincerely yours Nicholas

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task achievement
You could elaborate a bit more on each instruction to give a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
Consider splitting the paragraph about Bella and household duties to separate different ideas more clearly.
suitable writing tone
The letter has a friendly and polite tone throughout, suitable for writing to a friend.
greeting and closing
The greeting and closing are appropriately used, reflecting a personal touch.
logical structure
The structure is logical, with a clear introduction, body, and conclusion.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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