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WRITING The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

WRITING The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the
number
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 of
travelars
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travellers
 visiting
coribbean
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Caribbean
island
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islands
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 during the period from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, Seating places for tourists witnessed different trends in the time period.
While
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 the
visitors
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number of visitors
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 saying on cruise ships and on
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the island
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island
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islands
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 rose with some fluctuations, the total
number
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 of visitors
grow
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grew
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 over time. As the graph shows, the total
number
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 of visitors started at I
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millions
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million
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 in Zalo followed by a small increase to around 1,3
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millions
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million
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 in 2011.
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, it rose gradually until it went up to just over 2.5 million in 2016. After that, the
number
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 of tourists
climb
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climbed
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 sharply to 3.5 in 2017.
About the
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The
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aurage
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average
number
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 of tourists who staying
an
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the
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 island
remain
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remained
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 stable between 2010 and 2011
just
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at just
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 under I
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millions
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million
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.
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, there was a significant increase, about 1.5
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millions
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million
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 during the period from 2011 to 2013. Between 2013 and 2015, there level off at 15
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millions
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million
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.
In addition
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,
this
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 Figure fell to just over I million,
then
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if
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it
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 rose to 1.5 million.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just over" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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