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Some people think that the purpose of TV news programs is to entertain viewers. Others believe that news programs should be educational and informative. What do you think the purpose of TV news programs is? Support your opinion with reasons and examples.

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Certain people reckon that the purpose of
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news
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programs
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to keep
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 people entertained.
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 some
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 trust that
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programs
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 should be educational and informative.
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 essay On the one hand, one of the most obvious reasons for
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's new
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 is to entertain citizens who are stressed from daily work
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occupations. Nowadays there are a number of problems in individual life even when
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 as waiting for transportation that it may not be in the time.
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 a recent study from the Faculty of Economics at Harvard University, 8 out of 10 U.S. working men possess a higher chance to watch
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programs
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 if reporters were more entertained
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 of only showing an intense style. Another point to consider is today a multitude of children might not watch TV
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 anymore if the reporter could show
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 made more interesting, more children would get educated the word from the
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, in the country populations have less time to watch the
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 on
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 leading to avoiding watching TV to allow citizens to receive
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 only from social media. Social media will get a number of
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 that it didn't filler the truth before sending to other ones. For illustrate, a recent survey conducted by the New York Times reveals that two-thirds of Americans sharing data
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 their smartphone tend to get far false from real
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, I suggest that
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programs
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television
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 should combine educational citizens in national and if they were able to entertain the viewers, it would force people to watch the
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 the falsely sharing
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 from the internet.
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The introduction could be more engaging by clearly stating your position on the issue at the beginning, rather than stating it will be discussed. This would help set a more definitive tone for your essay.
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Ensure clearer transitions between ideas, especially between arguments supporting the entertainment value and the educational importance of TV news. This could be improved with transitional phrases to guide the reader seamlessly from one point to the next.
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Provide more specific examples or evidence to support your claims, especially around the educational value of news programs versus the entertainment aspect. While general examples are given, more detailed examples would strengthen your argument.
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Your essay includes an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, which provides a structured approach.
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You present both sides of the argument, suggesting an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
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The conclusion effectively summarizes your viewpoint and suggests a balanced approach, combining education with entertainment.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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