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In the future all cars, buses and trucks will be driverless. The only people travelling inside these vehicles will be passengers. Do you think the advatantages of driverless vehicles outweigh the disadvantages?

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In the recent past, people have seen the future in many different ways. One of these visions
are
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 seeing cars, buses or trucks as driverless or as they say autonomous driving.
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futurustic
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futuristic
 dream has its advantages and disadvantages when it
come
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 to manpower or safety. Let's talk about
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the advantage
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advantage
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advantages
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. When it
come
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 to
workforce
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,
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 kind of
vehicles
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 would set a record of saving money
into
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 having people as your drivers. It could be efficient, as you don't need to wait for a driver to take you anywhere you
wanted
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 to be. Imagine going
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 a trip, where your
chauffer
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chauffeur
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 would be late which makes you miss your flight.
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This
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 autonomous cars won't need any drivers and would just make it easy to drive anywhere. But in
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 there is always an advantage and a big one, which is Safety. In
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 world, Safety is a big issue. When it comes to
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 topic, a lot of things need to be considered. Reaction time for the cars when they encounter accidents or undisciplined drivers. Being lost
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 you are
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 route to your destination, because of
lack
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 of familiarity
in
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 the actual map of the place or even forgetting to update the system.
These kind
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 of disadvantages would be problematic not only for owners but
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 passengers of
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automotives
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automobiles
. In the end, the conversation
of
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about
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 having driverless vehicles
are
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 still ongoing. It is a continuous progress of updates and
self learning
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 of the artificial intelligence that would be used for it. But as long as the makers of it
adjusts
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 and make changes for these disadvantages
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 everything will be okay.
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Work on enhancing the logical structure of your essay by ensuring each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next, making your argument clearer.
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Provide more specific examples to support your points. This can strengthen your argument regarding advantages and disadvantages.
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Ensure a more thorough exploration of ideas to make arguments clearer and more comprehensive.
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, which helps frame your argument well.
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The essay introduces relevant points on both advantages and disadvantages of driverless vehicles, showcasing your understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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