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The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.

The chart below shows estimated world illiteracy rates by region and by gender for the year 2000. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information below.
The graph displays the estimated global
illiteracy
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 percentage by nation and by sex in 2000.
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, the
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rate
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significantly
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is significantly
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high
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higher
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 in females compared to males.
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, in undeveloped
countries
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countries,
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 the proportion of
illiteracy
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 is higher than in developed nations. In South
Asia
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Asia,
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 the
rate
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 of
illiteracy
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 is extremely high compared to all other countries, especially in women with over 50% of the spread of
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while
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 in men just nearly 35%.
Additionally
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, in Arab states and Sub-Saharan
Africa
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Africa,
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 the
rate
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 of
illiteracy
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were
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 similar between
these two region
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 in Arab males and
Sub Saharan
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Sub-Saharan
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 Africa the percentage of
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 was around 30%. In developed regions, the distribution of
illiteracy
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considered
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 very low in comparison to undeveloped countries.
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, In East Asia, the
rate
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 of
illiteracy
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 is acceptable in males with under 10%.
whereas
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, in females just 20%.
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, in Latin
America
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America,
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 the percentage of
illiteracy
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 is approximately the same between women and men.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words illiteracy, rate with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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