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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Jen, I am writing to let you know about my
countries’
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 traditions for celebrating New Year. We call
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day
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 Nowrouz, which is translated into
new
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a new
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day
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. I presume Iran is one of the few countries that celebrates the new year at the start of the spring.
People
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 in my country are really serious about how they perform
this
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 ceremony. What I mean is that they deeply care about keeping the feast as original as possible and
stay
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 faithful to the traditions. Since a few days before the Nowrouz
people
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 buy the items necessary to put on a
table
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 that we call Haft-seen.
People
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 put seven items on the
table
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that
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and
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 their names start with the same letter in Farsi,
therefore
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, the name Haft-Seen which is translated into seven words with
ther
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the
 letter “seen” in Farsi fits
this
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table
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 perfectly. Alternatively, It is a custom for our
people
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 to visit their elderly on
this
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 saint
day
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. When we visit the elderly, it is a tradition that they give the children some money as
gift
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a gift
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 to start their new year. As a child,
this
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 was the best part of the
day
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 for me.
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, now I really like the part that I have to buy the items for haft-seen and design a
table
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 for the ceremony. I hope one
day
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 you will be able to be here and celebrate the Nowrouz with me in my country. I am looking forward to hearing back from you. Love, Mahsa.

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task achievement
To strengthen the task achievement score, consider adding a few more personal reflections on New Year's importance and how it might differ for various age groups or in different regions of your country.
coherence and cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, try to connect the cultural explanation with personal experiences in a more integrated way. This might be done by expanding on how these traditions influence your daily life or relationships.
greeting and closing
The opening and closing of the letter are very well done, showing a clear and friendly tone suitable for a letter to a friend.
logical structure
The letter follows a logical structure by clearly introducing the holiday, describing the traditions, and then sharing personal experiences.
single idea per paragraph
Each paragraph addresses a single main idea, which helps in maintaining clarity and focus on each part of the topic.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant
  • reflection
  • goals
  • loved ones
  • fireworks
  • gatherings
  • traditions
  • public events
  • religious ceremonies
  • festive atmosphere
  • reconnect
  • exchanging gifts
  • resolutions
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