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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person's character and culture from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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A group of
people
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 believe that one element that demonstrates the population's personality and culture is their garments and the method of selecting them. I do not subscribe to
this
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 perspective owing to the fact that
people
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 opt for their
clothes
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 based on their situations and globalization prevents knowing about
people
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's culture from their
clothes
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. On the one hand, the fact
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 really crucial is that when populations are in various located their wear different garments that are based on their position , not on their character.
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, when communities want to go to an important meeting, offices, and so forth, they wear formal
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.
while
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 shopping, going to nature, and so on, they prefer to wear casual ones, so these changes in
clothes
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 create a hard assessment of their personality.
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, Today, international citizens choose roughly the same items for their
clothes
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 inasmuch as they follow the fashion, which is inspired by all cultures, and traditional costumes.
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, we cannot understand communities' social norms from the methods of their wearing.
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, in most companies' offices around the world, employees wear suits and formal garments
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 of their costumes.
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, wearing a T-shirt and jeans are regular
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 when individuals across the world want to go out.
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, knowing about a person's character and culture from the public's clothing is really hard because communities on several occasions select differently.
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,
people
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 across the world are globalized;
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, their
clothes
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 during the day are the same as each other.

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You've addressed the task prompt by providing arguments against the idea that clothing reveals character and culture.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural identity
  • Fashion statement
  • Traditional attire
  • Cultural heritage
  • Socioeconomic status
  • Stereotypes
  • Personal taste
  • Cross-cultural
  • Artistic expression
  • Cultural origins
  • Globalization
  • Context dependence
  • Judgment
  • Character traits
  • Professional environment
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