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The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the average daily minimum and maximum levels of air pollutants in 4 cities 2000. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar chart compares the average every day minimum and maximum levels of
air
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pollutants
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 in four different cities in 2000
Overall
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, Max N20 had the highest
number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 in
Mexico
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City
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,
while
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min
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Min
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 N20 had the lowest level of
air
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pollutants
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 in
Los
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Angeles
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.
To begin
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 with,
Min
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 N20 had the highest figure of
air
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pollutants
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 in
Mexico
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City
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 (80
micrograms
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),
whereas
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 it had the lowest
number
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 with 2
micrograms
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 in
Los
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Angeles
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.
min
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 N20 had the largest
number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 in Calcutta (approximately 50
micrograms
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) and Beijing ( 25
micrograms
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).
Moreover
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, Max N20 stood first with 200
micrograms
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 in
Mexico
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City
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 and it ranked second with 100
micrograms
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 in Beijing. mx N20 had a higher
number
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 of
air
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pollutants
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 than
Los
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Angeles
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, with the former with approximately 50
micrograms
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.
On the other hand
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,
Min
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 N20 had the highest figure of
air
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pollutants
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 in
Mexico
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City
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.
However
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,
Los
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Angeles
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, Calcutta and Beijing peaked at the lowest level with 40, 30and 14
micrograms
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.
In contrast
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, Max N2O had the highest figure of
air
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pollutants
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 in
Mexico
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City
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. Calcutta and Beijing had similar levels of
air
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pollutants
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 with 52 and 54
micrograms
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,
while
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Los
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Angeles
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 reached second at approximately 104
micrograms
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words air, pollutants, n, number, mexico, city, min, los, angeles, micrograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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