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A growing number of people work by telecommuting, that is, the employees works from home, using a computer and the internet to connect with the office. what are the advantages and disadvantages of working this way?

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It is certainly true that after the COVID-19 pandemic, significant changes came in corporate working culture. Telecommuting became an essential medium to
work
 from
home
 using a computer and an internet connection.
Although
 working from
home
 causes one to miss
office
 culture and fellow
employees
 in person, it saves
employees
time
, travel to the
office
, transportation money, and increases
productivity
.
This
 essay will discuss both the advantages and disadvantages of working from
home
.
Firstly
, the primary advantage of working from
home
 is that
employees
 save not only
time
 to travel to the
office
 but
also
 transportation fares, and at the same
time
, the
time
 saved has been utilized for
work
, thereby increasing
productivity
. In big cities like Bangalore, it takes at least two hours to reach the
office
 one way, and most
employees
 spend at least four hours
in
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traveling
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travelling
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. Thanks to the
work
-from-
home
 option,
it
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saved
employees
 precious
time
, and the
time
 saved has been
channeled
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 into
work
, resulting in increased
productivity
.
Secondly
, for organizations, the
work
-from-
home
 facility has reduced the costs associated with infrastructure and maintenance.
For instance
, it requires a lot of electricity to run air conditioners in the
office
 and
also
supporting
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 staff to clean
office
 premises.
On the other hand
, working from
home
 has a few disadvantages. The primary disadvantage is that
employees
 miss their peers and the
office
 environment. Going to the
office
 provides a chance to refresh one's mind and stay informed about what's happening around the world.
Moreover
, some
employees
 misuse the
work
-from-
home
 facility, focusing more on personal business
work
 than
office
work
.
To conclude
,
although
 working from
home
 leads to the absence of
office
 culture and fellow
employees
 in person, it saves
employees
 precious
time
 in
traveling
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travelling
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 to the
office
, transportation money, and increases
productivity
.
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