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Some people like to read online newspapers, on the other hand, others prefer to read paper based newspapers.Some people like to read online newspapers, on the other hand, others prefer to read paper based newspapers.Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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There are 2 types of
people
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 of consume
information
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, some
people
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 prefer online
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 as a resource of
information
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,
on the other
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hand
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and
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, others enjoy
to read
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reading
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paper based
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paper-based
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newspaper
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newspapers
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.
This
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 essay will examine some key points of both 2 different views and
outlines
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 my view.
To begin
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 with, digital
media
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 is now
commonly
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 nowadays
along with
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 online newspapers. Many
people
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 like to read online newspapers especially
young
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genereation
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generation
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more
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versitile
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versatile
, they can read anywhere and everywhere as long as they
connent
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connect
 to the internet.
Additionally
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, with technology
people
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 can gain updated
information
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 very quickly.
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, mass
media
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 have an official account to broadcast the news
in
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on
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 many different platforms including
web based
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web-based
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,
social
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including social
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media
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such
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 as Instagram, Tiktok, X and Facebook.
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This
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 various platforms give many
the
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options for
society
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a society
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which
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might they
prefered
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prefer
.
On the other hand
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,
for
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some
people
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 especially old aged,
where
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who
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they
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are not familiar with technology like to read
paper based
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paper-based
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newspaper
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newspapers
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,
due to
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 it
more
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being more
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clasic
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classic
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Furthermore
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,
the
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paperbased
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paper-based
paper based
 newspapers
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lack of hoax because it produced and printed by legal
media
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Incontrast
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In contrast
 the
information
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 not as
update
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updated
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 as online
media
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 because time period of printing.
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, the news of
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 event today can officially
announce
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 within two or three days, so it will be delayed
like
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2 days later.
To sum up
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, there are 2 different types of
people
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 to consume
information
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,
thrrough
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through
 online
media
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 which
more
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 enjoyed by
young
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the young
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 generation because more versetile and through paper based, which
more
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 enjoyed by old
people
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due to
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 lack of
knowlegde
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knowledge
to
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of
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 operate the technology. I personally think that, reading
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 through online news
more
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is more
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 beneficial because mass
media
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 offer various
platform
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platforms
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 to
chose
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.
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from.
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task achievement
Improve on providing relevant specific examples to support your points. Include clear and concrete instances to strengthen your argument.
task achievement
Ensure clarity and comprehensiveness in presenting your ideas. Some sentences need restructuring for clearer understanding.
coherence cohesion
Work on linking sentences and ideas more effectively to enhance cohesiveness.
task achievement
Your essay provides a complete response, addressing both views and including your opinion.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present, giving the essay a balanced structure.
task achievement
You successfully identify both sides of the argument and give examples to elucidate your points.
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