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The world is heavily dependent on oil for energy, which is unsustainable due to global warming. What future resource do you think will take oil's place? Why do you think this ?

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Nowadays,
oil
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consider
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as
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the main source of
energy
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 in the world
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, looking for alternatives is significantly important
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global warming.
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huge efforts to find
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alternatives
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oil
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,
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wind and water
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, I think
oil
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 will
remains
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as
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the main source of
energy
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 if the governments do not invest in
ulternatives
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alternative
alternatives
energy
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 sectors. At the onset ,
on
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 of the
ulternative
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alternative
 resources for
oil
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winds
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wind
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 and water
energy
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in addition
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pannels
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 which are considered
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sustainable .The whole concept is to
transfers
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sun light
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sunlight
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and
water fall
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in addition
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 to wind directions to produce
energy
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 electricity or heat .
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applicate
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this
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 sources in order to reduce
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global warming and the environmental effects of utilizing
oil
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 these alternatives , without
a real steps
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 from the governments and the
human
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humans
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itself
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themselves
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can not see
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 on the ground .
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into
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 saving our planet and
reduce
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reducing
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 the climate changes that have
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significantly
effects
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life on the earth .
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oil
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 as the main source of
energy
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could not
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 be replaced in the futuer few years unless the government and the
enviromental
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environmental
 institutions take serious steps
firstly
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 , to educate the
socity
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society
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dangerous
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 of keep consume
oil
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secondly
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and secondly
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looking
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enhancing
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researchers
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 and the companies that contribute s into
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 revolution. In conclusion,
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the
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awearness
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awareness
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encourage
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encourages
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the
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companies and
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institution
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institutions
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 that invest
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sustainable
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energy
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 sector .

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving the logical flow of your ideas. Ensure that each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next, and your arguments are presented in a more structured manner.
task achievement
Consider elaborating more on the examples provided. Expanding on specific instances where alternative energy sources are successfully implemented could strengthen your main points.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction effectively sets the context for the essay and offers a clear thesis statement regarding the need for alternative energy sources.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion nicely summarizes the main ideas and emphasizes the importance of promoting alternative energy solutions.
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