The Internet provides us with information about life and cultures of different countries and some people say it is not necessary to visit these countries to learn about them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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age of technology and high-speed internet, we have the privilege of looking up different places and cultures around the world with just a few taps. Some are of the opinion that as they can just watch some pictures or a video of a certain

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, they do not need to visit that

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in person, as it will make no difference, i am more inclined towards actually visiting and exploring a

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and just do some research on the phone. Travelling is an important part of human life, a person can learn so much

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visiting an unfamiliar

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, as one

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to travel he/she has the opportunity to

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with different cultures learn how others live their life, a podcast host name Joe Rogan

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mention his experience of travelling, sharing that

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he visits a different

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, and the exposer received, which helps develop his personality and give him wisdom,

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, the by visiting someplace experiencing the air, change in scenario, and the interaction is something that cannot be received on the internet.

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, not everyone has the budget to travel around the world, and fiance and time off from work is something not everyone is fortunate to receive.

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, tickets, hotels and shopping cost money and in

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prices are only going up. Fortunately, the internet is the next best thing as there are many channels on YouTube

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as Discovery and National Geographic Channel, which provide

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shows covering every tourist spot in detail, making you feel as if you are there. In conclusion, I understand that not everyone can afford an international trip, and being in the comfort of their home looking at different places on

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sounds similar, but the feeling that you get

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cannot be replaced by anything.

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Improve clarity by using clear topic sentences and maintaining consistent subject-verb agreement.

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Make sure to provide more examples to strengthen your arguments, adding more depth and relevance to your essay.

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Use connecting words and phrases more effectively to enhance the flow between your ideas.

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Divide long sentences into shorter ones to enhance readability and coherence.

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Your introduction clearly sets the stage for the discussion by addressing the main topic with a personal viewpoint.

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The essay includes an appropriate conclusion that reiterates the main ideas expressed in the essay.

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Relevant examples are provided such as references to Joe Rogan’s travel experiences, which adds credibility to your points.

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Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

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Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Sentence 2 - Example
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

308 words

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authentic experiences
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face-to-face conversations
cultural practices
bridging cultural gaps
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problem-solving skills
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online resources
real-world experiences
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The Internet provides us with information about life and cultures of different countries and some people say it is not necessary to visit these countries to learn about them. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

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