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Robert Snowden: Some people think that people are naturally gifted to be a leader. Others, however argue that anyone can learn leadership. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Introduction
I will
disccuss
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discuss
 what Robert Snowden
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tells
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tell
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tell us
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, that there are people
believe
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who believe
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 that
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leader
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leaders
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 are born gifted with
this
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talent
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.
Moreover
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, some disagree that to be a
leader
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 you can learn and improve your
skill
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skills
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. And for
me
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me,
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 I agree that
leardership
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leadership
 can be
gain
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gained
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 and
engahnce
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enhance
 if someone
work
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works
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 to gain those skills.
Body paragraph 1
It's true that people
born
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are born
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 with
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a veriaty
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veriaty
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variety
 of talents and some have a really
unice
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unique
talent
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. And it's true some
born
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are born
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 as
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leader
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leaders
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. But everyone
have
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has
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 his own
leadership
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 charisma. And
leadership
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 is a
knowldge
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knowledge
 that can be
tought
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taught
 and
gain
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gained
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. So if
somone
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someone
want
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wants
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 to improve his
leading
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leadership
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 skills, he can focus on the things he needs to improve and and he can get a better result for sure.
Conclusion
To
conclud
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conclude
 about what Robert Snowden
say
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says
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 about
people
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people's
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opinion
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opinions
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 about
leadership
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. Some believe it's a
nature
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natural
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talent
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comes
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that comes
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 for
somepeople
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some people
 when they
born
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are born
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. Others think it can be
tought
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taught
tough
 and
gaing
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gaming
going
gaining
 for
anyperon
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any person
. And
what
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apply
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I
believed
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believe
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 it's true that some
born
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are born
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 gifted with
leadership
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talent
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, but it's
also
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 true that any person can improve his skills
about
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in
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 leading and become a better
leader
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 for himself and for others.

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coherence cohesion
Work on improving logical structure by organizing the essay into clear and distinct paragraphs for each argument. This will help improve clarity and make your points stand out.
task achievement
Enhance the depth of your discussion by providing more comprehensive ideas and examples to support your arguments. This will help achieve a more complete response.
general
Focus on reducing grammatical errors and improving sentence structure to ensure that your arguments are clearly communicated.
task achievement
You have considered both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the topic.
coherence cohesion
Your conclusion effectively summarizes your standpoint, which helps in reinforcing the main message of your essay.
Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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