Robert Snowden: Some people think that people are naturally gifted to be a leader. Others, however argue that anyone can learn leadership. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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Introduction

I will

disccuss

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discuss

what Robert Snowden

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tells

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tell

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tell us

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, that there are people

believe

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who believe

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that

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leader

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leaders

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are born gifted with

this

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talent

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Moreover

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, some disagree that to be a

leader

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you can learn and improve your

skill

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skills

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. And for

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me,

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I agree that

leardership

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leadership

can be

gain

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gained

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and

engahnce

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enhance

if someone

work

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works

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to gain those skills.

Body paragraph 1

It's true that people

born

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are born

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with

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a veriaty

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veriaty

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variety

of talents and some have a really

unice

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unique

talent

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. And it's true some

born

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are born

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leader

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leaders

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. But everyone

have

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has

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his own

leadership

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charisma. And

leadership

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is a

knowldge

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knowledge

that can be

tought

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taught

and

gain

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gained

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. So if

somone

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someone

want

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wants

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to improve his

leading

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leadership

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skills, he can focus on the things he needs to improve and and he can get a better result for sure.

Conclusion

conclud

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conclude

about what Robert Snowden

say

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says

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about

people

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people's

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opinion

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opinions

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about

leadership

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. Some believe it's a

nature

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natural

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talent

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comes

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that comes

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for

somepeople

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some people

when they

born

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are born

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. Others think it can be

tought

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taught

tough

and

gaing

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gaming

going

gaining

for

anyperon

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any person

. And

what

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apply

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believed

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believe

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it's true that some

born

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are born

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gifted with

leadership

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talent

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, but it's

also

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true that any person can improve his skills

about

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leading and become a better

leader

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for himself and for others.

suliman.kariri

Jan 27, 2025

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coherence cohesion

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task achievement

Enhance the depth of your discussion by providing more comprehensive ideas and examples to support your arguments. This will help achieve a more complete response.

general

Focus on reducing grammatical errors and improving sentence structure to ensure that your arguments are clearly communicated.

task achievement

You have considered both sides of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the topic.

coherence cohesion

Your conclusion effectively summarizes your standpoint, which helps in reinforcing the main message of your essay.

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Paragraph 1 - Introduction

Sentence 1 - Background statement
Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

Sentence 1 - Summary
Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
3
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
39
Grammar mistakes
detected issues

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

3 paragraphs

194 words

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Robert Snowden: Some people think that people are naturally gifted to be a leader. Others, however argue that anyone can learn leadership. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

the internet will bring about a new freedom of information and so narrow the technology gap between developed and developing countries. to what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement.

Some university students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Other believe it is important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

More and more business meetings are taking place online. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend.

In many parts of the world, women study science and technology but do not work in these fields. What are the problems women face? What solutions can be taken to encourage women to work in science and technology?