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The best way to make roads safer is to make vehicle drivers take a driving test each year. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 modern era, every individual
have
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 their own private vehicle to ease their daily routine.
Driving
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The driving
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test
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 is required to get eligibility for
license
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a license
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.To improve driving skills among people, driving
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test
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tests
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 should be taken annually.I partially agree with the above statement, which will
be discuss
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 in the subsequent paragraphs. There are
number
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a number
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 of areas which
needs
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need
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 to be improved
beside
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 taking road
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test
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tests
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 once a
year
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.Driving
test
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 costs a lot for
low income
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 earners as it
become
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 difficult for them to incur
such
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 expenses.
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, there should be some seminars to raise awareness among people regarding
rules
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 and
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safety
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the safety
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 of roads.
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, preparing for driving
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test
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tests
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 every
year
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 may loose confidence among people in case of failing.
Without confidence
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 could increase the chances of getting
more
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into more
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 trouble
while
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 driving because confidence
push
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 the person to go beyond their potential or to handle any possible uncertainty. On the flip side, preparing for
driving
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a driving
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test
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 after one
year
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 helps
individual
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individuals
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 to keep in touch with
rules
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 and regulations. They need to remind
themselve
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themselves
 every
year
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 before giving
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the test
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test
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tests
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, which would ultimately reduce the chances of breaking
rules
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. Violating
rules
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 leads to chances of accidents, demerit points and penalties.
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, In Japan, there is
food
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a food
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 production company, where they provide
refresh
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 training to their employees to ensure their work
safety
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 and ethics.
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, it is recognised as
best
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 company every
year
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 because
of
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quite rare incidents
has
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 happened as compared to other firms.
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 to
this
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, conducting
driving
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a driving
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 exam each
year
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 develops fear in every person's mind in
term
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 of
loosing
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losing
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. If any individual
do
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does
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 not pass their driving
test
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then
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 it is not solely
waste
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a waste
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their
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of their
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 time but their efforts as well .
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 fear will
made
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make
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 them learn
rules
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 and drive safely to prepare themselves for exams.
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,
government
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the government
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 should take serious
actions
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action
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 against
who
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those who
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 are violating road
safety
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 and
rules
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 by charging
high
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a high
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 amount of penalty.
However
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,
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the
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requirement of
driving
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a driving
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test
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 every
year
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 can help to maintain
the
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apply
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road
safety
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. There is a more other things
need
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that need
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 to
consider
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be considered
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 to aware individual towards driving safely .

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coherence cohesion
Enhance logical flow between ideas. Ensure that sentences transition smoothly, maintaining a clear progression throughout the essay.
task achievement
Further elaborate on your examples to enhance relevance and specificity. Providing more specific details will strengthen the task response.
task achievement
Explore more balanced views by considering both advantages and disadvantages of the annual driving test more fully. This will help to provide a comprehensive response.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a strong conclusion, which help frame your arguments nicely.
task achievement
You provide a balanced view by partially agreeing with the statement, which shows critical thinking.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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