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The bar chart shows the number of visitors to four London museums. Interpret the information as given in the chart and write what you perceive in 150 words.

The bar chart shows the number of visitors to four London museums. Interpret the information as given in the chart and write what you perceive in 150 words.
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The presented bar chart compares data about how many people visited four various museums from
June
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 to
December
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.
Overall
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, it was important that the number of visitors to all places other than the British one declined over the period of 4 months.
Moreover
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, the figure for visitors in August was the highest.
According to
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 the diagram, in the beginning, the population who visited the Science museum, the most popular building in
June
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, hit roughly 420000;
then
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 their reduced to 400000 between July to August;
thereafter
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, they rose moderately to the highest point of 500,000 in September;
however
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, they declined significantly to 300,000 in
December
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. British museums reached nearly 410,000 from
June
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 to July, after that, they leapt sharply and peaked at just over 700,000 in August;
nevertheless
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, their popularity dropped considerably to almost 470,000 in
December
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. the graph demonstrates that the History Museum scored approximately 400, 000 from
June
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 until July. Later it climbed enormously to 600,000 in August;
then
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 it dipped overwhelmingly to roughly 270,000.
In addition
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, the National Museum grew from nearly 200,000 in
June
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 to just under 400,000 in August;
then
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 it went down to just under 200,000 in
December
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words june, december with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "roughly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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