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Some believe that students should begin learning a language very early in school while others think these subjects should be taught later. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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There is a debate over in which period should students start learning a
language
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, with some saying beginning in early school is better and others arguing that it should be taught later.
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 in older years people are more responsible, children’s brains are adapted to learn a new
language
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 without hard effort. Starting with the former view, older generations are more likely to learn
languages
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 faster. The reason is they have more responsibility than younger which makes the
language
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 learning process quicker.
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 as they take the
language
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 learning period seriously, they do not skip any classes and do all required home assignments which is the main aspect of learning
language
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 swifter.
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, 70% of developing new
language
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 skills depends on practice and elderly people can engage themselves to do it easily.
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,taking new
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 lessons later has great potential. Regarding early classes in a new
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 , it is more effortless which is why youngsters have the brave skills to acquire new knowledge from
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.
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this
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 reason,they do not have to struggle with grammar and their accent will be as strong and good as native speakers. To give an example, newborn children can learn to speak an unknown
language
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 even though they do not know the grammatical rules.
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, it is their great ability and priority to gain an understanding of
languages
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. In conclusion, compared to older individuals who can learn
languages
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while
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 struggling but especially with responsibility, younger people have the natural skill to learn unexperienced
languages
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 without hard work. So I believe that starting new
language
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 learning in an early school is more effective and effortless.

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task achievement
Your essay presents an overall good structure, addressing both sides of the argument and providing a personal opinion. However, to achieve a higher score, consider providing more specific examples and further expanding your points for better clarity and comprehension.
coherence cohesion
Although your essay flows well from one paragraph to the next, consider making use of more linking words and cohesive devices to guide the reader through your argumentation more smoothly.
task achievement
You presented clear arguments for both sides of the discussion and concluded with a personal opinion, which fulfills the requirements of the task adequately.
coherence cohesion
Your introduction sets up the central debate effectively, and the conclusion sums up the discussion clearly and concisely, which contributes to the logical structure of your essay.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cognitive development
  • cultural awareness
  • effective language acquisition
  • early exposure
  • natural pronunciation
  • intonation
  • foundational literacy skills
  • multilingual education
  • intensive study
  • foundational understanding
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