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Band 5.5

It is important for everyone, including young people, to save money for their future. To what extend do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, it can be seen that people are changing their spending
habit
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. They claim that it is vital,
especialy
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especially
 for the young generation, to save a certain amount of
money
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 each month. I do agree with
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 saving strategy, and in
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 essay, I will propose some reasons
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this
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 assumption.
To begin
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 with, most families tend to keep a portion of their income to buy things in the
future
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. Buying an apartment,
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, is one of the most important goals that every young family is
plannig
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planning
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 wish can only be reached when they observe
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their
spendings
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, and try to decrease unessential purchases. Another benefit of saving
money
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,
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 is getting ready for facing unexpected
future
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 circumstances. Some major diseases, like cancer, can occur in one’s life, and if he
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 not have enough
money
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 to buy the medications at the right time, the disease will
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worsen and it will ruin his life. So, it would be a logical attitude to be aware of
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 complications and get prepared to cope with them.
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, some people claim that we only live once, and we should enjoy spending our current budget, because we may not see tomorrow.
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 belief, they usually prefer the present joy by doing some activities like gambling
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 and try to ignore their
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 aims. As a
consequense
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consequence
, they might lose everything and their life would turn into a real disaster. In conclusion, the majority of the population
are
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 getting aware of economic tips, and they are trying to save
money
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. Most of the
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parents
 instill
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 belief
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 their children to help them
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 their buying goals and
facing with
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 probable difficulties. In my opinion, it is vital to have a saving strategy, because it is one of the most important ways to achieve our goals.

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language use
Try to attend to minor grammatical errors, such as subject-verb agreement ('he do not' should be 'he does not').
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to strengthen your main points, such as detailing what 'some activities like gambling' might entail.
coherence cohesion
Enhance the logical structure by clearly stating each paragraph's main idea at the start.
coherence cohesion
You presented a clear introduction and conclusion, framing your argument effectively.
task achievement
Good use of examples to support your points, such as mentioning buying an apartment and dealing with diseases.
task achievement
The essay covers a range of perspectives, supporting a balanced view on the topic.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • safety net
  • unforeseen circumstances
  • emergencies
  • future investments
  • retirement planning
  • financial discipline
  • habit of saving
  • amassing wealth
  • substantial fund
  • opportunity cost
  • additional income
  • inflation
  • purchasing power
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