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Some people believe online reading material should be used for a child to learn to read whereas others believe only printed materials should be used. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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There is a wide variety of reading materials available online, and as we know books stories and articles help children develop their reading cognitive and scientific skills. Some believe it’s better for children to learn online
due to
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 its benefits
such
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 as being
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 (with free platforms like
youtube
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) diverse in formats and enjoyable with videos that make learning more fun and engaging.
On the other hand
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, some argue that children should learn only from printed materials to protect their health and encourage socializing and play. In my opinion, both methods are good but online reading should be limited to one hour daily.

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Expand on the introduction to give a clearer overview of the topic and the points to be discussed.
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Provide more specific examples or evidence to support each view discussed.
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Improve the logical flow by adding linking words or phrases between sentences and ideas.
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Ensure that each argument presented is thoroughly explored before moving to the next.
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The essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument, offering a balanced view.
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A clear conclusion is present, providing your opinion on the topic.
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The essay maintains a good focus on the topic throughout, without unnecessary digressions.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • interactive elements
  • audio pronunciations
  • animations
  • interactive quizzes
  • current and relevant information
  • diverse interests
  • screen exposure
  • physically interact
  • better retention
  • screen time
  • digital media
  • distractions
  • balanced approach
  • fine motor skills
  • tactile learning
  • spatial arrangement
  • tradition of learning
  • lasting relationship
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