"Vaping products should be totally banned in Ireland." Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Explain your answer

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Nowadays, in a world with new
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modern
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many products now have an alternative
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it
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and cigarettes are an example of
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with the new attention
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the
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e-cigarettes which
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vapes
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.
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, the main reason for
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new product was to encourage smokers to quit as
people
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believe that it is less harmful
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our
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regular cigarettes which are known to contain many different chemicals. And many individuals think vaping should be banned in Ireland. In
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essay, I will discuss why vaping should be completely
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in the country.
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with, many countries tried to
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smoking products in the
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few years because of the
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harm
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effect on their citizens
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also
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and also
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for
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the huge cost
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the
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care system. And some of them
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that after a long discussion between the government and the manufacturers, which ended with finding a new solution or a new product that can help
people
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to quit smoking and it was
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vaping
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.
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, the
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purpose
purposes
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was to reduce the
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number
of
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smoker
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but
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eventually it increased
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and most of the users are teenagers.
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, teenagers believe that vaping makes them look cool
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that
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is why they are the
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proportion of
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vapers around the world.
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,
Vapes
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were originally made to help adult smokers quit traditional cigarettes, vaping has
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become a common habit among teenagers. Many young
people
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are drawn to vaping
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attractive
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, and peer pressure, believing it to be less harmful.
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, the reality is that
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vapes
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liquid
have
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a high amount of addictive substances like nicotine, which can harm their physical and mental
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. Ireland will have a new generation with many serious
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issues, including respiratory problems,
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and heart
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disease. Addressing
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issue now is critical to protect the
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and future of young
people
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in the country. In conclusion, I believe vaping should be banned not only in Ireland but worldwide. And countries must launch campaigns to raise awareness about its dangers and promote a healthier society.

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Task Response
Ensure that you clearly state your position in the introduction, although it was implied, making it explicit can provide a stronger framework for your essay.
Task Response
Introduce more detailed examples or evidence to strengthen your arguments, particularly on how vaping has increased the number of smokers among teenagers.
Coherence and Cohesion
Work on creating smoother transitions between paragraphs and ideas to improve the flow of the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Focus on precise language use to avoid minor inaccuracies or repetitions, which can sometimes make it slightly confusing.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Task Achievement
The writer attempts to provide reasons and examples to support their points.
Task Achievement
There is a clear understanding of the societal issues related to vaping and its impact on teenagers' health.
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