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The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the features, and make comarisons where relevan

The graph below gives information about the percentage of population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020 with predictions for 2030 and 2040 Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the features, and make comarisons where relevan
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The line chart illustrates the percentage of
population
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the population
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 living in urban areas in four Asian countries,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, Malaysia, Thailand, and Indonesia, between 1970 to 2020 with
the
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predictions for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, the trend shows
significant
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a significant
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 increase in all four countries, with Malaysia having the largest urban population throughout the period. In
Philippines
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the Philippines
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, the percentage lived
in
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from
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the
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1980 to 1990 rose gradually by around 20%. It is projected to continue rising, reaching 56% in 2040.
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, Thailand shows
steady
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a steady
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 rise, from 20% in 1970 to grow by 30% in 2020.
Forecast
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 indicate
to
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it to
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 reach 40% by 2040.
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, Malaysia showed a much higher urban population, increasing
in
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from
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 30% in 1970 to 70% in 2020. It will continue to increase by 80% in 2040, the highest among the four countries. Indonesia
,
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 shows
a
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constant growth, which started
15
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at 15
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% in 1970
reaching
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reached
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 50% in 2020 and
predicted
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is predicted
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 to reach 60% by 2040.

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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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