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In many countries household wast e.g .food packaging is increasing day by day. What are the reasons? How can this process problem be solved

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Recyclable materials have become an indispensable part of modern life. There has been a frequently discussed issue of whether household waste is crucial for
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, or whether it poses risks. I firmly agree that there are a lot of beneficial effects to reduce using food packaging.
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 and insights.
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, critics contend that exposing people to pollution
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 potentially can contribute to several diseases which
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 on heart and lungs.A study conducted at Nizwa
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 illustrated that most people who have problems
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due
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 to waste.
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many individuals attack
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 by reducing garbage in their lifestyle.
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, there is a growing preference among the population for solving
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 issue as
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 awareness to assist them . The American Educational Association indicated that joint efforts between
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 an essential role
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globe
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.
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, the outcomes of risk are not limited only to
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 but
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 have a profound impact on tourism. It increases the level of awareness . A report by a UNESCO survey showed that 90% of visitors
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 about
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 phenomenon.
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, they join to recycle plastic and
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 materials in certain administrations. In conclusion,
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 household waste has some challenges, I totally agree that recyclable materials play
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 crucial role in the present era.
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, the government should
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 people to decline
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 garbage not only that but
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 publish workshops in the nations.

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Task Achievement
Ensure your main points are clearly stated and directly answer the question. In the introduction, clearly state the problem of increasing household waste and outline the reasons and solutions you will discuss.
Coherence and Cohesion
Be sure to organize your essay logically. Each paragraph should have a clear main idea, support it with explanations and examples, and not stray off-topic.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more effectively, ensuring a smooth progression throughout your essay.
Task Achievement
You included relevant statistics and studies to back up your points, which strengthens your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay has an introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points effectively.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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