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The chart belows shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Umar

The chart belows shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011, and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Umar
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The bar chart illustrates information about
annual
Correct article usage
the annual
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 earnings of
the
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apply
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households
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 in 2007 , 2011 and 2015 in
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the Us
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Us
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US
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.
Overall
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,all of them
had
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apply
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rose
while
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,
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apply
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the figure
of
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for
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 average
households
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unchanged
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was unchanged
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 over the given period. Generally,the vast majority of inhabitants made a profit above average. The number of
households
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 between 75,000 to 99,999 million
dollars
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 fluctuated
litle
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little
 and still
staying
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stayed
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 the lowest percentage of profit in the
Us
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US
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.
Benefit
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Benefits
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 of 100,000
dollars
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 or more
also
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 vacillated and in 2011 years became on
third
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one-third
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 of profits .
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However
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However,
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 after
went
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going
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 up and reaching a peak
more
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of more
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 than 30
millions
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million
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 earnings in 2015 for the period recorded The digit of 50,000 to around 75,000
dollars
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, beginning from 2007 saved stability over the given period and in 2015 had around 22
millions
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million
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. Another two
number of
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apply
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households
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 exactly less than 25,000
dollars
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 and 25,000-49,999 amounts
has
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have
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 precise results ,
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moreover
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moreover,
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 both of them oscillated little and
has
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have
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 less than 30
millions
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million
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words households, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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