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The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one ocuntry between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

The charts below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one ocuntry between 1920 and 2019. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph shows the information about percentages of
electonic
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electronic
item
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items
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 that
has
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have
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 been used by every family in one country from 1920 to 2019. In conclusion, the usage of washing
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machine
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machines
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,
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refrigator
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refrigerator
, and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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are
Verb problem
has
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 increased
years
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year
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 by
years
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year
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. In 1920,
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refrigator
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refrigerators
 and
washing
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the washing
a washing
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machine
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was commonly use
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was commonly used
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 by
household
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households
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,
which is
Verb problem
;
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 40
percents
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percent
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 of them were using
washing
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the washing
a washing
show examples
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machine
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machines
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 and 30
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percent
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per cent
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 were using
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refrigator
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refrigerators
. On the other side,
Vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
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 were not used in 1920, so 0
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percent
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per cent
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people
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of people
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using
Wrong verb form
used
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 that item. from 1920 to 2019, it
is show
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is shown
is showing
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 that
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refrigator
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refrigerators
 and
vacuum
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cleaner
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cleaners
show examples
 experienced
dramatic
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a dramatic
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 rose and
reach
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reached
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 their peak.
Refrigrator
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Refrigerator
reach
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reached
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 its peak in 1980,
while
Linking Words
vacuum
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 cleaner reached
it's
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its
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 peak in 2000.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, the usage of washing
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machine
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machines
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steadly
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steadily
rose
Wrong verb form
risen
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 in
Linking Words
last
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the last
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 ten years which is 40
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percent
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per cent
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 in 1920 and 70
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percent
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per cent
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 in 2019.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words machine, refrigator, vacuum, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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