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Band 5

'Prevention is better than cure''. Researching and treating disease is too costly so it would be better to invets in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree

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Nowadays, people around the world are suffering from the widespread
prevelance
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prevalence
 of
diseases
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, which has negatively affected people`s
wellbeing
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well-being
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.
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, some people argue that more
money
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 should be spent on preventive
measure
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measures
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instead
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 of researching and curing
diseases
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. In my view, precautious measurements could decrease
infestation
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the infestation
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 of
diseases
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,
however
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, investing
money
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on
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in
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 inventing
treatment
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treatments
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 for severe
diseases
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 is
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 crucial. Preventative
measures
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 play a pivotal role in eliminating the spread of infections
,
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 because it helps
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 the immune system to be able to fight
diseases
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.
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, preventative procedures are easy and
low budgeted
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comparing
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 to
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the developement
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developement
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development
 of treatments .
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the
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breast Cancer early diagnosis has proved to be very effective in treating
such
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 a serious disease.
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, many campaigns around the world have been launched to encourage women for Cancer
early
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check-up
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, which have a significant impact on preventing the spread of
this
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 severe disease.
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, it is substantial that governments invest
money
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on
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 precautionary
measures
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,
such
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 as regular check-ups and healthy
life style
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lifestyle
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 awareness campaigns because it helps in controlling infections.
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 precautionary procedures are very effective, it is an undeniable fact that they are not enough to control the spread of infections. Research and development of treatments are
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 very important, particularly for chronic and serious
diseases
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,
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 as Diabetes,
Alzheimer’s
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and Alzheimer’s
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. HIV and Cancer. Research and development of medicines are crucial and require
investmment
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investment
, because these serious
diseases
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, unfortunately, can not be treated only with preventative
measures
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 but with effective medications. In conclusion, both preventative
measures
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 and
development
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the development
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 of medications are equally essential, and
goverments
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governments
government
 should invest more
money
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on
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 them. It is true that “Prevention is better than cure”,
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, saving
lives
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the lives
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 of millions is
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 vital, as there are many people worldwide who are suffering from severe
disease
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diseases
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 which threaten their lives.

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grammatical
Work on improving grammatical accuracy by minimizing spelling errors like "prevelance" to "prevalence" and "precautious" to "precautionary," which will enhance the overall clarity of your arguments.
task achievement
Consider providing more varied examples, perhaps from different types of preventative measures or treatments beyond cancer diagnosis, to strengthen task achievement by illustrating points more thoroughly.
introduction conclusion present
The introduction clearly presents the topic and your stance, setting a solid foundation for the argument.
complete response
Your essay effectively addresses both sides of the argument, acknowledging the importance of both preventative measures and treatment research.
introduction conclusion present
The conclusion effectively summarizes your standpoint and reiterates the balanced view towards prevention and cure, closing the discussion well.
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