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Band 5.5

Some people believe that social media sites, such as Facebook or Twitter, have a negative impact on young people and their ability to form personal relationships. Others believe that these sites bring people together in a beneficial way.

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In the present era, social
media
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 has become
the
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significance
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 part
in
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 the life of
people
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 . some
people
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 think that it has negative effects on youngsters
as well as
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 on their ability to make
personal
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a personal
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 relationship,
while
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 other
people
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 believe that these
sites
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 are beneficial to bring
people
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 together.
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 I am in the favour of latter view ,I will discuss both
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perspectives in the upcoming essay. There are some reasons
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why
people
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 think that social
media
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 has
negative
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 impact on young
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 and on their ability to make personal relationships. youngsters usually imitate some influencers or bad
people
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 on social
media
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 and they follow their daily activities. These activities can lead to some negative ideas and thoughts in the
mind
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minds
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 of young
people
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 .
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 , some influencers take life risks by doing stunts
in
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 blogs and
posted
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 on social
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, which are dangerous for their lives. These stunts may
follow
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 by youth.
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people
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who
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believe that social
media
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sites
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 connect
people
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 together in a beneficial way because it can make
connection
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connections
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 with those who are living outside in different countries and helpful to know about their culture. They can share their feelings and cultural differences with each other.
People
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 can easily make interactions and find friends through social
media
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sites
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, youngsters can talk with their friends in their leisure time and may take
advices
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advice
pieces of advice
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 from them.
Moreover
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, it is helpful to get information regarding anything
.
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People
people
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 can make groups by adding other
people
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 ,and
ask
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about
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the
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help. In conclusion, there are some negatives of social
media
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sites
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youngester
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youngster
youngsters
 in making relationships
like
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as they can follow negative thoughts on
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this
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 platforms but
positives
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the positives
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 are more of
this
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 trend.

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task achievement
While your essay addresses the task effectively, make sure to clarify your position clearly throughout the essay and ensure all points are fully developed.
coherence cohesion
Improve coherence by using transitional phrases and linking words to better connect your ideas and paragraphs.
task achievement
You provide a balanced discussion by addressing both views with supportive examples.
coherence cohesion
Your essay includes a clear introduction and conclusion, framing your argument well.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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