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The table and charts show information on teh police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize key information and make comparison where relevant.

The table and charts show information on teh police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of britain. The table shows where the money come from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarize key information and make comparison where relevant.
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The table illustrates the
police
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budget
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 in 2017 and 2018, and the pie charts show information about how money was distributed in three different sectors.
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, the majority of
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police
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the police
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budget
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 came from the national government. The
police
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budget
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 from all sources and the total
budget
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 slightly increased in 2018 compared to 2017. The largest proportion of the
police
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budget
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 was spent on salaries. In 2017, $175.5
million
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 was allocated for the
police
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 by the national government, and it increased in 2018 and $177.8
million
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 was allocated for the
police
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.
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, $91.2
million
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 came from the local taxes, and in 2017, it increased and 102.3
million
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 came from
this
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 source. The lowest proportion of
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budget
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the budget
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 came from other sources which was $38
million
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 in 2017 and 38.5
million
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 in 2018 respectively. The total
budget
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 in 2017 was $304.7
million
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 and it increased to $318 in 2018. 75% of the
police
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budget
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 was distributed to pay salaries in 2017, and in 2018, it experienced a small decrease and 69% of the
police
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budget
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 was allocated to pay salaries. In both years, 17% of the
budget
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 was allocated for building and transport.
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, the least amount of
budget
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 was spent on technological costs which was 8%
and
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apply
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with an increase of 6% in 2017 and 2018 respectively.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words police, budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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