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The line graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in urban country between 1987 and 2007.

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The line graph illustrates the number of overseas
visitors
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 to three different areas ( the coast, the mountains, and the lakes) in a European country over 20 years between 1987 and 2007. Units are measured in thousands.
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, all three kinds of areas showed increasing in overseas
visitors
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 over the given years.
Furthermore
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, the coast had the mainly highest number of
visitors
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 throughout
this
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 period. With regards to the coast, it started with 40
thousand
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visitors
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 in the first
year
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 and climbed to reach a peak value of under 80
thousand
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visitors
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 in the
last
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year
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.
Similarly
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, the mountain began with 20
thousand
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visitors
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 in 1987,
then
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 it rose below 40
thousand
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 tourists in 2007.
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, The lakes were the lowest point in the first
year
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, which was 10
thousand
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 tourists in 1987 before jumped dramatically to become the largest around 74
thousand
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 in 2002, but it fell to 50
thousand
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visitors
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 in the
last
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year
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 77%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, thousand, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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