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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed.
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The table and pie charts provide data about the 2017-18 police
budget
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 of one area of Britain. The table displays the sources of the
budget
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's funds,
while
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 charts illustrate where the funds went.
Overall
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, the police
budget
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 increased with
national
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the national
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 government for both years. In terms of expenditure, salaries remained the primary form. In 2017, the police had a total
budget
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 of 304.7
million
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, which rose significantly
318.6
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million
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punds
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pounds
 in 2018. The majority of the
budget
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 was sourced by the national government, with an increase from 175.5
million
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 to 177.8
million
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punds
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pounds
. Of all sources of funding, local taxes saw the largest growth from 91.2
million
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ponds
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pounds
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 to 102.3
million
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, whilst other sources accounted for 38.5
million
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 of the total
budget
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 in the year
of
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2018, 0.5
million
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punds
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pounds
 more than the previous year. Expenditure
primarly
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primarily
 consisted of officers and staff salaries,
although
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 the proportion decreased from 75% of the total to 69%.
However
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, spending on technology almost
dubbled
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doubled
 from 8% to 14%,
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 expenditure on buildings and transport remained unchanged at 17%.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • budget allocation
  • funding sources
  • government policies
  • economic conditions
  • community services
  • crime prevention
  • public safety
  • significant increase/decrease
  • distribution
  • assessment
  • reflection
  • allocation shifts
  • budget comparison
  • impact analysis
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