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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparis, who were climbing up calmly, with spantanious surges.ons where relevant.

The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparis, who were climbing up calmly, with spantanious surges.ons where relevant.
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The chart shows the
timeseries
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time series
time-series
 data of the
number
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 of foreign
students
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 from
Indonesia
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,
Hong
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Kong
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, Malaysia,
Singapore
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and Singapore
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 between 1982 and 2000 in
Australia
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. As seen in the graph, in general, all of
countries
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the countries
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 had
an increased trends
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an increased trend
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 of
students
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 in
Australia
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. From 1982 to 1986,
Hong
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Kong
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, Malaysia, and Singapore experienced stagnation in terms of
number
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 of
students
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 in
Australia
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.
However
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,
Malaysians
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Malaysian
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student
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students
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 rose from 1982 to 1984.
Conversely
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,
Indonesia
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 showed a
slightly
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slight
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 increase
of
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in
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 residence arrival.
Moreover
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, in
this
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 period, Malaysia
have
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had
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 the highest
number
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 of
visitor
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visitors
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arrival
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arriving
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 for education compared to other countries. In the range of years 1990 to 1996,
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number
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a number
the number
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 of people studying in
Australia
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 rose especially for
Hong
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Kong
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 that have the highest
number
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 of
students
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.
Furthermore
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, from 1996 to 1999,
Hong
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Kong
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 and
Indonesia
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shown
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showed
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 a significant increase in
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
students
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. But, both countries experienced a decline in 2000.
Additionally
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,
Indonesia
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 became the country with the highest
number
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 of people studying in
Australia
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since
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from
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 1996 to 2000.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, indonesia, hong, kong, australia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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