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The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and charts below give information on the police budget for 2017 and 2018 in one area of Britain. The table shows where the money came from and the charts show how it was distributed. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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the
polic
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police
budget
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 from 2017 to 2018 in one area of the UK. The table gives some information about where the
money
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 came from, the charts
shows
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 how it was distributed. About the table, we can see the
budget
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source
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is
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 national government, Local Taxes,
other
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and other
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 sources. The total
number
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 is 304.7
million
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 in 2017. The main
budget
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 was national government, it was 175.5
millon
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million
 in 2017, the the
number
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 rose to 177.8
million
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 in 2018. The
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number of
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budget
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of
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 local taxes was 91.2
million
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 in 2017, in 2018 it increased to 102.3
million
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.
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 the
budget
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 of other sources, the
number
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 was 38
million
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on
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 2017, it
was growth
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grew
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 to 38.5 in 2018. The total
number
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 of police
budget
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 was 318.6
million
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 in 2018.
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 the pie chart, we can see the
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message
about
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of
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 how the
money
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 was spent.In 2017, the
money
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 was most
spend
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 on salaries, the
percentage
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 was 75%. The
percentage
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 of buildings and transport was 17%, the
percentage
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 of technology was 8%. In 2018, spending
money
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in
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on
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 salaries kept a huge
percentage
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on
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2018, it was 69%. The
percentage
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 of spending
money
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 on
building
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kept
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remained
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 stable. The
percentage
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 of technology was increased to 14%. In conclusion, In both years, the
money
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 was mainly spent on salaries and the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 of the
budget
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 was spent on technology,
meanwhlie
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meanwhile
,the source that contributed the most to
police
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the police
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budget
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 in both years was
National
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the National
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 Government.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words budget, money, number, million, percentage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fiscal allocations
  • Revenue streams
  • Budgetary oversight
  • Expenditure
  • Financial appropriation
  • Government grants
  • Local taxation
  • Operational costs
  • Capital investment
  • Public safety
  • Crime prevention
  • Community policing
  • Resource allocation
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Budgetary constraints
  • Fiscal year
  • Fund disbursement
  • Budget deficit/surplus
  • Trend analysis
  • Financial sustainability
  • Law enforcement funding
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