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The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000.

The pie charts show the reasons people in Great Britain had for visiting art museums in the years 1990 and 2000.
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The two pie charts demonstrate the
reason
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reasons
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 for visiting art museums in Great Britain between 1900 and 2000.
Overall
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, there are noticeable changes in the two charts in the years 1990 and 2000. The first one is almost half of
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the travelers
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travelers
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travellers
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 visited the art museums to learn and gain knowledge in both years, and the second one is people visiting to just fill their travel schedule decreased compared to 1990. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the
category
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 of ‘to learn and gain knowledge’ constituted almost half and remained nearly
same
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. It is followed by the categories of ‘to attend a special exhibit’ and ‘to spend time with their family and friends’, increased by approximately 5% each. There is a
category
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, to fill their travel schedule, which experienced a plummet from 27% in 1900 and to 12% in 2000.
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 the
category
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 of ‘to buy art’ rose marginally from 1% to 5%,
‘Others’
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category
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 decreased 1% by 2000.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words category, ‘to with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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