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You are studying a short course in another country. Your accommodation was arranged by the course provider. There is a major problem with the accommodation. Write a letter to the course provider. In your letter, say what the problem is describe the accommodation you thought you were getting ask the provider to solve the problem

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Dear Sir, I am writing
this
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 letter to
complaint
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complain
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you
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to you
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 about some problems
of
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with
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 my
accomodation
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accommodation
. My name is Geeta and I am a student
of
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in
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 your Human Resource Business Management course. Before joining my course,I applied for
single-room
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a single-room
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appartment
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apartment
 near my university. Unluckily, I was given a shared room far from my University. My roommate is not
co-operative
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cooperative
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 and friendly with me. I have to
make
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apply
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concentration
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concentrate
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 to complete my projects and
assignment
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assignments
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,but he plays loud music in an
appartment
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apartment
 till late
night
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at night
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. He does not maintain his cleaning duty . It has poorly
ventilised
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ventilated
 and I was expecting two windows and proper
ventilisation
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ventilation
. I would
appericiate
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appreciate
,
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if
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it if
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 you find
single
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a single
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 room for me near my University. It should be in
peaceful
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a peaceful
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 ambience and properly
ventilised
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ventilated
. I am waiting for your supportive action regarding
this
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 matter.
Your
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Yours
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 sincerely, Geeta Sharma

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task achievement
Your letter is mostly focused, but ensure all main points are covered clearly. State your specific requests more explicitly.
coherence cohesion
Work on creating a smoother flow between your ideas and sentences, using linking words and phrases.
coherence cohesion
The closing is appropriate and polite, reinforcing a respectful tone throughout the letter.
task achievement
You've identified key issues and provided specific examples, which strengthens the task response.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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