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Technology is becoming progressively universal. In the fullness of time, classroom teachers will be totally substituted for technology. Do you agree or disagree?

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In
this
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 present world, the usage of
technology
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 is constantly on the rise. Even classrooms are among the many places that enjoy the usage and
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benefits
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. It is disagreed that
classroom
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teachers
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 will be totally substituted for
technology
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. Analysing the incapability of disciplining
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students
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 with
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,
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 the limitation in the learning process of
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 taught with
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 will prove
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.
Firstly
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, a robotic teacher made with
articial
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artificial
 intelligence would lack
sucient
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sufficient
 control over its
classroom
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students
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.
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, it is widely known that kids need to be thoroughly watched by their
teachers
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 to be sure that they take their classwork seriously and do not fool around when classes are going on. Sadly,
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 is a task robotic
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 will be incapable of carrying out.
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,
this
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 makes it clear that
classroom
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teachers
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 will never be totally substituted for
technology
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.
Secondly
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, the learning process of
students
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 would be disrupted if they
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 taught by robotic
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, which may slow down some
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’ ability to comprehend information taught in lessons.
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, kids love to be motivated before lessons are taught effectively.
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 is a quality that many human
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 have but robotic
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 do not have.
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 it becomes apparent that human
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 will never be replaced with robotic
teachers
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 in a
classroom
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. To summarise, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to
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 and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons.
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,
it is clear that
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 the idea of running a
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 completely by a machine cannot be supported. After
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this
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 subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over
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-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of
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,
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teachers
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 will never be substituted for
technology
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.

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Try to expand your arguments a bit more and provide deeper explanations for your points. Including more detailed examples could strengthen your case.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure to proofread your essay to correct minor inaccuracies such as typos and spelling mistakes (e.g., 'benets' should be 'benefits', 'articial' should be 'artificial').
coherence and cohesion
Consider varying your sentence structures to enhance the flow of your essay and to keep the reader engaged.
task achievement
Your essay presents a clear stance on the topic, which is crucial for task achievement.
coherence and cohesion
The structure is generally logical and guides the reader through your ideas effectively, especially with strong introductory and concluding paragraphs.

Your opinion

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Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • progressively
  • substituted
  • prevalent
  • crucial
  • enhance
  • support
  • guidance
  • interaction
  • personal touch
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