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People generally know that the environment is important. However, most individuals still don't take responsibilities to protect the environment. Why is this? What should be done to encourage people to protect the environment? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experience or knowledge.

Preserving the environment has always been crucial for not only
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 planet's sustainability but
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 for all the creatures
long lasting
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well being
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.
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, A lot of people seem
skeptical
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 about
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 issue which may return to many aspects, that will be thoroughly
expalined
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explained
 in the following paragraphs. First of all, neglecting our duties towards nature can be some sort of ignorance. Many people may have not
recieved
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received
 a proper
eductaion
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education
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 topic.
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, they cannot see beyond their actions and what they eventually cause
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 the long term استهتار/اهمال

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to thoroughly explain your main points and link them clearly to your thesis statement. This will strengthen the logical progression of your argument.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples or personal experiences to illustrate your points better. This will enhance your task achievement and make your arguments more compelling.
language accuracy
Be careful with spelling and punctuation, as small errors can distract the reader. For example, 'eduction' should be 'education' and 'expalined' should be 'explained'.
task achievement
Your introduction presents the topic well and shows a good understanding of the issue at hand.
coherence and cohesion
The use of connecting phrases demonstrates some effort to create coherence in your writing.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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