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Writing Samples Band 6 The given diagram shows the process of making electricity from coal. Naz The given diagram shows the process of making electricity from coal. Naz

Writing Samples Band 6 The given diagram shows the process of making electricity from coal. Naz The given diagram shows the process of making electricity from coal. Naz
The diagram demonstrates how to make
electricity
Use synonyms
 from the goal in the factory.
Overall
Linking Words
, there are eight stages of making
electricity
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. Beginning with the Mine stages. And ending with producing
electricity
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 for houses and industries.
To begin
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 with, coal comes from
Mine
Correct article usage
the Mine
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 and
then
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 it is crushed. After that,
crusher
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the crusher
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 goal is delivered to the factory. In the next stage, coal is added
with
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to
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 solid waste by a cooler. The process ends with the way is burned to produce the
electricity
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. Eventually, customers enjoy using
electricity
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 in
the
Correct article usage
apply
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houses and industries.

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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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