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Band 5.5

Some people think that to lead a successful life, a university degree is important. Others believe that this is no longer true nowadays. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In the modern era, some people have an idea about the importance of a licence degree.
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, other types of folks consider that in the modern world, individuals do not need to take a diploma. Personally, I totally agree with the second claim.In
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 essay, I will try to explain two of my ideas.
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, some of the works need requirements.
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 as medical, law, and engineering things. A regular person does not know anything about these topics. So, to be closer, you need to have a licence degree.
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 you would become a pilot, doctor, lawyer etc.
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, these days, with the changing world, individuals are prone to
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 of job opportunities,
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, they do not have to have professional knowledge.
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, social media platforms workers. They are totally free as abilities. They are working as influencers. They can earn money with their photos or videos. It looks like easy but not. Influencers need to spend too much time on posts.
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, everyone can do it.
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, car mechanics, electricians, and cleaners
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 do not pass all of the college things. If they can do it, it is okay for our lives.
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, we need their knowledge. The capitalist system
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 us new problems. Nowadays,there are two types of people.
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 ones are workers, they have to work, second ones are spenders. The first ones exist to serve to second. It depends on, what type of life you want to live.
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, everyone chooses their careers. In conclusion, every single occupation is significant. Personally, I believe that, to be useful, do not need a diploma. You should learn about a successful life.

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Try to provide a clearer introduction that outlines both views and your opinion more explicitly.
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Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more smoothly and to help the reader follow your arguments.
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Include more detailed examples to support your points more thoroughly, particularly in your main arguments.
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You provided relevant examples that illustrate your points effectively, such as social media influencers and various tradespeople.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • benchmark
  • evolving landscape
  • credential
  • vocational training
  • entrepreneurship
  • digital literacy
  • autodidact
  • innovative approaches
  • skill set
  • networking
  • lifelong learning
  • meritocracy
  • practical experience
  • self-taught
  • upskilling
  • resilience
  • adaptive learning
  • critical thinking
  • soft skills
  • technological advancements
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