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The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart displays information about details of spending weekly
income
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 of families in one country between 1968 and 2018.
Overall
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, most of the spending on weekly
income
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 in 1968 was higher than in 2018.
While
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, there are 3 activities the average weekly spending was decreased in 2018 (housing, transport and leisure).
Besides
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, household
goods
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activity
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 remained stable.Food
activity
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 was the most significant spent
income
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 in 1968 at 35% and dropped dramatically to nearly 17% in 2018. Housing and clothing and footwear, both were the second spent in 1968 by 10%.
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, in 2018 housing dramatically increased to 19%
whereas
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 the spending on clothing and footwear
activity
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 decreased slightly to 5%. Fuel and power in 1968 was spent approximately 6% which was the smallest in number during the year and declined to 4% in 2018.Household
goods
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 and personal
goods
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 in 1968 were spent in the same number which was 8% but in 2018 household
goods
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 spent was remain the same as in 1968.
On the other hand
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, personal
goods
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 spending dropped to 4%. Families had spent their weekly with transport
activity
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 at approximately 8% in 1968 these
also
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 the same number as previous activities and significantly climbed approximately to 14% in 2018.
Therefore
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, usage of
income
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 of leisure was around 9% in 1968 and rose extremely to 22% which is the highest spending in 2018.

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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words income, goods, activity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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