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The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Assel 2

The map below shows the development of an area between 1995 and the present. Assel 2
The map portrays the development of an
area
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 from 1995 to the present.
Overall
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, there were a number
noticeable
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 adjustments to the construction and the conveniences of
this
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area
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. The district was reformed thoroughly, seeing essential changes to its private residences, and its commercial and recreational establishments were developed. The most striking modification is the cultivated forest park at the
eat
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east
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 side of the domain. Farmland was fused with
forest
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a forest
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 park to make room for a golf
area
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 and tennis courts at present. Another substantial change is the removal of the fishing port. Commuter convenience
had
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is
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 more
importance
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 at present. Some apartments were put up for residents in the west.
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, the destruction of the fish market near the sea made room for apartments along the sea. Turning to the opposite side of the accommodation, the shop was demolished and a restaurant was devised on that land.
Furthermore
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, the establishment’s parking
area
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 was built beside it. At
last
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, the cafe stood unaltered at the bottom corner of the west side.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "present" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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