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The plans below show the layout of a public park in 1990 and in 2020

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The maps illustrate the changes in the layout of Central
Park
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 between 1990 and 2020.
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, the
park
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 underwent significant developments, with the addition of new facilities and infrastructure aimed at enhancing
visitor
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 experience. In 1990, the
park
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 featured a Krishna temple in the northwest corner, a flower garden in the
center
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, and a Buddha statue nearby. A children’s play
area
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 was located in the southwest, adjacent to a telephone booth. A small shopping
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 was situated near the entrance, and a koi pond was positioned in the southeast. Toilets were located in the northeastern part of the
park
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. By 2020, several modifications had taken place. The telephone booth was removed, and a café was introduced near the entrance. The shopping
area
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 was reduced to a single shop, and a stage for programs was added beside the flower garden.
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, a Museum of Local History was constructed in the northeast, replacing the toilet, which was relocated to the southwest near the children’s play
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. Despite these changes, the Krishna temple, Buddha statue, flower garden, koi pond, and children’s play
area
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 remained in their original locations. In summary,
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 the
park
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 retained its key features, several modern amenities were added to improve its functionality and cultural significance.

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Consider incorporating more specific comparisons or contrasts between the two time periods to highlight the changes more clearly.
coherence and cohesion
The essay provides a clear overview and logical structure, making it easy for the reader to follow the changes in the park.
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You effectively described the key features of the park in both time periods, showing good awareness of the task requirements.

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