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Some people think that formal education should start for children as early as possible. While others think that it should not start until 7 years of age. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Some say that schooling should begin for kids at a very young being they can
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 others would argue that it is not ideal before 7
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 essay will argue that
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 starting formal information after 7
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 gives children time to play and develop without academic pressure, I believe starting learning at a young
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 can save lots of time in
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 competition time . On the one hand, letting a
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 study after 7
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 of
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 can provide a kid to play and develop without academic pressure. They can play freely and start learning at their will because
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 playing is very important for a
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's physical and mental development.
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, many
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 ago in India, parents used to send their minor to an academy after 7
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 and that led to better development in the
child
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, I believe that 7
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 is not an ideal
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 to start education because it wastes a lot of a
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's
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, starting literacy as early as possible can be beneficial for a younger because he can invest his
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 in studying and be more focused and save hours as he can finish his institute at a young
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 and give many hours to his career and future and become a successful man at a young
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, in today's fast-paced
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 parents get admission of their children to school at a young
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 and in their 20th they can be successful in earning persons and enjoy their
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 . I believe that starting an academy from an early
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 is more beneficial because it makes a person successful at a young
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. In conclusion,
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 starting learning at 7
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 can give a person
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 to play and self-development but it wastes a lot of
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therefore
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, I believe that parents should let their minor study from a young
life
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 and he can become successful at a very young being.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly states both sides of the argument and your opinion more explicitly. Make sure to structure the essay to reflect the points discussed in the introduction.
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Try to clarify and elaborate on your main points. This can be achieved by providing more detail and ensuring that each idea is fully explained.
coherence and cohesion
Use varied vocabulary and sentence structures to enhance readability. Some phrases are repetitive and could be improved for better expression.
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You have addressed both sides of the argument and provided a clear opinion, which is essential for a balanced discussion.
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The use of examples helps to illustrate your points and shows a practical understanding of the topic.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cognitive development
  • Social interactions
  • Formative years
  • Curiosity
  • Structured environments
  • Preschool activities
  • Unstructured play
  • Developmental pace
  • Emotional and social skills
  • Undue stress and pressure
  • Natural development
  • Informal learning methods
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