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The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.

The pie chart shows how people use four modes of transport in the city of Edmonton,as well as how the table shows data from five different driving reasons.
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The pie
chart
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 provides information about the
use
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 of four different transport (Car, LRT, Bus and taxi) in Edmonton City.
Measurede
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Measured
 in percentages.
And the
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The
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 table
chart
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present's
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presents
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 data for five
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reason's
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reasons
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of
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for
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 driving.
Overall
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, it is clear from the pie
chart
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 that people
use
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 cars more than other
transportation's
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transportation
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whereas
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 their
us
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use
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 of both
of
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apply
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Bus and
Taxi
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Taxis
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 is the lowest. And in the table
chart
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, commute to work is the highest
reason
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 than others,
whereas
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 shopping and leisure activities
is
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are
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 the lowest.
According to
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 what is shown in the first
chart
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, that people who
use
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 cars in Edmonton City was a lot. about 45 per
cent
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. And both of Bus and
taxi
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taxis
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was
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apply
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the Sam percentage. At 10 per
cent
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. And they
use
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 Light Rail Transit about 35 per
cent
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. The table
chart
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. The
reason
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 for using cars in commute to work, At 55 per
cent
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 . And using
car
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the car
a car
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 for shopping and leisure time is in the same per
cent
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, 10 per
cent
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. And for the
last
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 two
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reason's
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reasons
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 taking children to school and business, Kind of
closs
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close
 at 40 per
cent
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 and 45 per
cent
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respectivley
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respectively
.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "whereas".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, use, reason, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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