Crime is a big problem in the world; many believe that nothing can be done to prevent it. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give your own opinion.

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Crime is seen as a major obstacle to the growth and

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prosperity of nations and

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society

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worldwide.

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some argue stopping illegal

activites

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activities

activity

is an extremely difficult challenge

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however

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, others argue. In my opinion, a combination of government policies and efforts from

society

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will

reduced

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the crime rates.

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essay will discuss the preventive measures in detail.

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, law enforcement to impose

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hefty fines on citizens so that anyone would think multiple times before

induldging

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indulging

in violation. Because of the hard punishments, fewer

peoplw

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people

will

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fault

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reduced

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the

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crime rates.

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, in South Korea if any of the

citizen

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found

doing

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robbery he or she will be given life

imprisoment

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imprisonment

death

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penalty.

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, people in South Korea feel safe and secure.

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society

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should step forward and accept criminals back into

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society

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and

given

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them equal job

oppurtunities

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opportunities

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will support them to feel

being

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respected again from scratch and

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with their families without feeling ashamed and rejected.

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, in

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there is a community of

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who

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welcome

jouvenille

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juvenile

offenders to work at their shops.

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community teach them new skills

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them

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to taste the work life. In conclusion, I firmly

belive

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believe

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collaborative work between the government approach with the help

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the

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society

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can significantly curb rising

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criminal activities, creating a safer and

harmonious

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more harmonious

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world.

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coherence and cohesion

Improve the overall clarity and structure of your paragraphs. Each paragraph should focus on a single main idea.

task achievement

Provide more specific examples to support your points, particularly in your second paragraph.

language

Make sure to proofread for spelling and grammatical errors, such as 'induldging', 'peoplw', 'imprisoment', 'oppurtunities', 'belive', and 'pf'.

task achievement

The essay presents a clear argument and viewpoint regarding the prevention of crime.

coherence and cohesion

You introduced the topic well and provided a brief overview of your main points in the introduction.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

232 words

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