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Band 6.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed books or newspapers because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying? To what extent, do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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Nowadays, with the advancement of technology, digital reading
platforms
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 as e-
books
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, online articles and news websites have made it easier for people to access a wide range of
information
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 for free.
This
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 shift in how we consume
information
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 has led some to predict that printed
books
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 and newspapers will generally disappear in the future.
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 I agree with some aspects of the argument, I disagree with its
overall
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 conclusion. In
this
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 essay, I will demonstrate my reasons with some relevance. There is a positive aspect of electric
books
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. Digital
platforms
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 allow readers to assess content for free at any time, and for anywhere.
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, with an e-reader or a smartphone, one can read a book
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 community, without needing to carry a heavy physical copy. Applications and websites like Kindle provide millions of
books
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 and audiobooks in seconds, and news outlets like BBC or Reuters
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 provide some articles without charging, making it extremely easy for readers to choose what to read based on their preferences.
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, there are some negative aspects. On one hand, not all online content is accurate or verified.
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 websites and blocks may offer free
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, they may lack editorial oversight leading to misinformation. To illustrate, anyone can publish an article on
platforms
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 like Wikipedia, which could potentially lead to inaccuracies.
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, printed
books
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 and newspapers typically undergo a rigorous editorial process and fact-checking, which makes them more reliable sources of
information
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, especially in fields of science and history.
On the other hand
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 for many people, there is irreplaceable pleasure in holding a physical book. The smell of the pages, the texture of the paper and the act of turning a page are experiences that digital
platforms
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 cannot replicate. In brief,
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 the rays of digital
platforms
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 for reading are unable, printed
books
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 and newspapers are likely to remain in use in the foreseeable future, particularly for special groups of individuals who enjoy the tangible experience of print or need the reliability of printed material. In many cases, these traditional formats will coexist with digital options which serve their unique purpose and audience.

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Task Achievement
Ensure that each main point is developed with depth and detail, providing more examples to strengthen your arguments.
Coherence and Cohesion
Link ideas between paragraphs more smoothly to enhance the overall flow of the essay. Transition phrases can help with this.
Overall Language Use
Vary your sentence structures and use a wider range of vocabulary to enhance your written expression.
Content
You have a clear opinion and structure, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.
Content
Your essay presents some relevant points on the pros and cons of digital vs. print media, demonstrating critical thinking.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • printed books
  • newspapers
  • online reading
  • digital content
  • paywall
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-saving
  • environmental impact
  • traditional reading experience
  • ownership
  • personal connection
  • reliability
  • credibility
  • digital divide
  • accessibility issues
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