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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph line illustrates how many
visitors
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visiting
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visited
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 one Caribbean
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the graph shows a growth
of
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in
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visitors
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 throughout the given period.
While
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 fluctuating for both tourists staying on the
island
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 and staying on cruise ships. In 2010 and 2011,
people
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 who stayed on the
island
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 were 0.7
million
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 and after a year there was a slight increase to around 1.3
million
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visitors
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. Between 2013 and 2015, the
visitors
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of
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to
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 the
island
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 were stable
around
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at around
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 1.5
million
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people
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 before a slight decrease in 2016 and climbed back in 2017 to 1.5
million
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.
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,
people
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 who stayed on the cruise ship fluctuated between 0.2
million
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 and 0.5
million
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 for four years
in
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from
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 2014 until 2017 there was a significant growth from a
million
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 to 2
million
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of
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apply
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people
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 enjoying staying on the cruise ship. The total number of both groups increased dramatically throughout the given period. In 2010
they
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there
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 were a
million
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of
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apply
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tourists
for
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to
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 the
island
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 and
increased
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this increased
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 to its peak
with
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of
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 3.5
million
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 in 2017.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words visitors, island, people, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuating trend
  • initially
  • significant increase
  • slight decline
  • momentary setback
  • steady increase
  • minor fluctuations
  • reaching a peak
  • moderate growth
  • notable growth
  • surge in popularity
  • seasonal or yearly factors
  • stagnation
  • growing appeal
  • visitors worldwide
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