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Some people say that when on holiday in a foreign country, the best way to get to know the people and their country is by staying in a hotel. What is your opinion about this?

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It is argued that spending
vications
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vacations
vacation
 on a
hotel
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 is a better way to learn more about the local people and their
country
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 as well. I agree with
this
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 idea since by staying at a
hotel
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 one can meet some
citezens
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citizens
 and
also
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, the
hotel
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 can plan some activities for its guests. If
a tourists
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tourists
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dicide
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decide
 to stay at a
hotel
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 during their holiday that
dose
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does
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 not mean that they cannot learn about the local
culture
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. In fact, they can meet many people from the
country
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 they are visiting,
such
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 as other guests or
the
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apply
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hotel
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 employees. Those
individulas
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individuals
 can help to create a picture
about
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of
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 their
culture
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, language and even their clothes because it might be difficult to
soclise
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socialise
 with other people
becayse
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because
 of the language
barrir
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barrier
.
For example
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, In some hotels there
are
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is
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 a
speical
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special
 staff who might help the
vistors
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visitors
 and give them some accurate information about their
country
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 and
the
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they
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also
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 recommend the best and safest ways to
expoler
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explore
 it.
On the other hand
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, there are many hotels that ensure to include many activities to get to know the
country
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. These
activites
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activities
 contains
planing
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planning
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a
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apply
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group or individual trips to local
meusems
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museums
 that display
about
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apply
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the
culture
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 and traditions of the
country
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. They can as well provide city maps that
allows
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allow
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 the
vistors
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visitors
 to explore the
city scapes
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cityscapes
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 and historical locations. Some hotels will provide an
experince
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experience
 for tourists to try the
tradtional
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traditional
 and authentic food.
For instance
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, Bayat
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hotel
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Hotel
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 in Abha, Saudi Arabia
provide
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provides
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 a wide selection of local food from the city of Abha and these dishes are prepared by Saudi
experinced
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experienced
 chefs following the
orginal receipe
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original recipe
. In conclusion, a person can travel and spend a great time
at
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in
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 other countries
while
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 staying at a very
beatiful
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beautiful
hotel
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 at the same time.
This
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 can
occure beacuse hotles
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occur because hotels
 are perfect places to meet many citizens from that
country
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in addition
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 to the services that
it
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they
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provides
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provide
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 to its guests to have a full
experince
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experience
about
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of
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this
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culture
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.

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task achievement
Clarify your introduction by explicitly stating your opinion and summarizing the main points you will discuss in your essay.
coherence and cohesion
Use more varied sentence structures to improve the fluidity of your writing.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that all grammar and spelling are accurate to enhance clarity and professionalism in your work.
task achievement
You provided specific examples that illustrate your points, such as the Bayat hotel in Abha, which strengthens your argument.
task achievement
You included both sides of the argument, showing critical thinking and consideration of different perspectives.
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