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Band 4.5

Government are spending too much money on a space research while there are still lots of problems on earth to what extent you agree or disagree ??

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It is true that the authorities spend
a-lot
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 of
money
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 on
space
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 research because they believe that
people
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 can live in
space
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 if they discover and develop
this
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 place. I completely disagree with
this
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 statement and I believe that
government
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the government
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 should spend
money
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 to develop
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earth
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the earth
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 because it is
a
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 best place to live here for
people
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. On the one hand, I believe that the government should spend
money
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 on
earth
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especially
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 in education fields, agriculture, infrastructures ,and in accommodation.
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, in
Africa
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 they suffer
of
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lack
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a lack
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 of food, home and
in
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education so other countries should assist them to live in a comfortable environment.
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, authorities should spend
money
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in
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on
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 the health care of
people
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due to
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the
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folks play a vital role in developing
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country
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.
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,
this
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 can lead to
develop
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the development of
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 the
country
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 and all
people
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 will be a strong body
and
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in academic fields.
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, some
people
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 argue that
space
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 research
have
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 benefited in
develop
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developing
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country
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countries
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 because they will discover
other plane
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another plane
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.
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, recently they
discover
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 that Mars
consider
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 as
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earth
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Earth
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which
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where
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 can
people
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 live
their
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so
this
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 will decrease the pollution
in
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 the
earth
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 and
reduces
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reduce
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 the number of cars and
factory
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factories
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.
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,
this
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 will provide
job
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jobs
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 for
people
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 and
their
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there
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 will be no poverty on the
earth
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. In conclusion,
although
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the
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apply
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space
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 research
have
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has
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 benefits in
develop
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developing
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country
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countries
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 I
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however
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, assert that government should spend
money
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in
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on
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the
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health care and in education to have
a
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good and healthy
people
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to develop
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in developing
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 countries.

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Your opinion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Long-term survival
  • Scientific understanding
  • Technological advances
  • Earthly benefits
  • Pressing issues
  • Climate change
  • STEM fields (Science, Technology, Engineering, and Mathematics)
  • Balanced approach
  • Geopolitical stability
  • Space exploration
  • Space research
  • International cooperation
  • Priority
  • Immediate issues
  • Global challenges
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