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Band 7.5

You are going on a short training course at a college in Sydney, Australia. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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Dear Sir/Madam, I am Brown, I am new to
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 town and going to pursuing the short training courses in our
college
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 in Sydney,
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 I am writing
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 letter to request accommodation in the LES
college
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 hall centre for 3 months.
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, I am from the United Kingdom, so I don't have friends or colleagues in Australia.Unfortunately, I am going to stay for a short span of time in Syndey so the landlord is
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 not willing to contract the lease agreement for rental. I would like to have a small furnished studio and some basic amenities
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 as an oven, refrigerator, washing machine and WIFI connection.
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, if I get accommodation closer to the
college
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 it will be beneficial to access to
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 library for my study purposes. my course is going to commence on March 21st,
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 if I get the accommodation before March 20 it would be greatly appreciable. Thanks for the prompt response on
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 matter. Kind regards, RK

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Ensure the introduction clearly states your situation and purpose for writing.
coherence and cohesion
Organize the letter into paragraphs that each focus on a specific aspect of your request.
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Consider using more formal language to enhance the tone of your letter.
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You have included a clear explanation of your situation and need for accommodation.
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The letter maintains a polite tone throughout, which is appropriate for communication in this context.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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