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You are going on a short training course at a college in Sydney, Australia. You need somewhere to live while you are there. Write a letter to the accommodation officer at the college. In your letter: explain your situation describe the accommodation you require say when you will need it

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Dear Sir and Madam, I'
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this
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 letter regarding
for
Change preposition
apply

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my upcoming training course
in
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at

It seems that preposition use may be incorrect here.

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 your university, I'
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also
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 asking for a request for accommodation
while
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 staying there. As an International student, it's my first time to be in Australia, and I don't have friends or relatives who
is
Change the verb form
are

The singular verb is does not appear to agree with the plural subject friends or relatives. Consider changing the verb form for subject-verb agreement.

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 staying there. I'
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 kindly asking for a room, with a bed,
study
Correct article usage
a study

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 table and a good internet connection for my studying. It doesn't matter if I share with other students inside of the accommodation, as long I have an address to stay in. The duration of my stay will be
start at
Verb problem
from

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1st
Correct article usage
the 1st

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 of June until the 30th of September.
Additionally
Linking Words

Usage of linking words is important in IELTS writing. They help create clear connections between ideas in your writing. They improve the flow of your essay by showing relationships between paragraphs and sentences. Using appropriate linking words demonstrates your ability to write cohesively and will help you achieve a higher band score.

, I'd love to extend my stay for another 1 month so I have time to tour the city. All in all, my rent will be finished on the 30th of October until I can go back to my country. I hope you can provide me
some
Add the preposition
with some

It appears that you are missing a preposition with the verb provide. Consider adding the preposition.

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 room for my stay, and I'
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 looking forward to hearing from you. Yours faithfully, KC

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language
Make sure to use the correct prepositions, such as 'at' instead of 'in' when referring to the university (e.g., 'at your university').
task achievement
Clarify the timeline of your accommodation needs by stating specific dates more clearly, which would help improve clarity.
task achievement
Your letter demonstrates a clear request for accommodation and explains your situation as an international student.
suitable writing tone
The use of a polite tone throughout the letter is commendable and appropriate for the context.
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